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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

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Nowadays human activity causes damage to our
nature
. Growth of population, industrial development, manufacturing and other aspects affect our plants and animals around the world. The problem is complex and it's not easy to find a way how to compensate for
this
 damage, but it doesn'
t
 mean we shouldn'
t
 search for a possible solution. The rapid expansion of factories, energy stations, and pollution of our air is a consequence of constantly growing human needs. Some countries have limited resources, and the environmental problem is significant,
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 other countries don'
t
 care about a negative impact on our
nature
 because of economic situation or a huge amount of territories. Unfortunately, the overall interest in providing safety for our ecological situation is very low. That's why it's more likely that we will not see a rapid change in our environment. It's not true that people cannot make our environment better. There are many successful projects of reducing damage to our
nature
. One of them, electric cars, is sharply decreasing air pollution on whole continents.
For example
, Norway's government decided to remove all taxes and reduce income taxes for electric car owners. The consequence of
this
 strategy caused the cleanest air in Europe and now more than 75% of cars don'
t
 use gas. The other example is Sweden's garbage recycling factories, which caused a full overcome of all rubbish around the country. Summing up, it's extremely difficult to make a rapid change in our environment, but every project rather is big or small, can sharply improve our
nature
's safety.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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