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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment what damage does plastics do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #plastics #government #individuals
In recent
time
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 synthetic
waste
 is
major
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 concern
of
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the
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society . Among several,
wate
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waste
plastics
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plastic
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 items like
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a bottle
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bottle
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bottles
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,bags and other packaging are harmful to
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the environtment
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environtment
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environment
 and living beings. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss
about
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the
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how
plastic
waste
effects
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affects
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 the health of human beings and life of other animals and possible
action
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actions
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 to stop
accumulation
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the accumulation
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 of
such
wastage
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.
Firstly
, most of the commodity plastics are non-biodegradable and exist on the earth over a long period of time, which leads to several
threat
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.
For example
,
large
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accumulation
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accumulations
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 of
waste
plastic
 mostly
end
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 up in the unscientific burning of them – to clean the location and reduce the
waste
. But ,
Such
 uncontrolled
plastic
 pyrolysis leads to
emission
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the emission
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 of hazardous gases
to
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and
thus
 air
get
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 polluted.
Additionally
,
the
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recent research shows
the
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that
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 inhaling
of
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such
waste
 gas from polymer even can create cancer.
Secondly
,
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 material
dumping
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out side
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outside
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 or
in
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 water will be eaten by animals from plants and
sea
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the sea
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 , and
this
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finally
 associated
to
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 their death
. .
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...
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 On the hand , both the government and
persons
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people
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 can contribute equally to avoid the problems by proper segregation of
waste
 at home and
implement
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of
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suitable
policy
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policies
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 to
waste
recycle
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 respectively. If an individual sort the
plastic
waste
 , it would be easy to process for any kind of recycling.
Such
 activities could reduce the economic burden of sorting associated
in
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reuse
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the reuse
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 process. Our public system should support
to
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this
 by arranging to collect
waste
and
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for
further
 processing.
Additionally
,
the
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they
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 can incorporate incentives for
plastic
 recycling , so that can get much attention from the corporates. By doing,
such
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 combined effort from government and
citizen
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citizens
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 can solve
this
 arising problem
into
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 a certain extent. In conclusion,
plastic
waste
 is a major threat to
the
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society and thoughtful action from the government and individuals is necessary to overcome or reduce its impact.
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