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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government ‘s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Introduction- According to some people, the
government
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 is accountable for conserving the
environment
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 while others insist that, environmental protection is the duty of every person. In my opinion, the
environment
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 can be protected by both humans and the administration. There is no doubt that we all are responsible for spoiling our
environment
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 because of our lack of proper awareness and consumerist lifestyle. For
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 reason, we all are responsible to save our ambience and not only the
government
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. It can be saved by changing some of our daily habits,
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 as properly disposing of waste, using mostly public transport and more importantly planting trees around us can bring huge improvement.
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, the
government
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 has higher authority, to make a
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 plan to protect the
environment
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.
Government
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 should step out and make appropriate plans.
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, factories which are producing toxic waste and gases should be monitored and suggest the use of
environment
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-friendly machines, at the same time , the administration should encourage companies to build more green energy equipment so that they can reduce pollution. In conclusion, in
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 ,essay we state that no individual can contribute to controlling the
environment
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 by putting their efforts into planting and wasting materials.
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, how the
government
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's role can make a big change by taking the initiative to produce greenhouse industries that why both are equally responsible for saving our
environment
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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