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"The best things in life are free" To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Some claim that the pleasant
things
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 in
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’s
life
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 do not need to pay, while others might think that many activities which make
people
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 happy actually cost a lot.
In my
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 opinion, I totally agree with the former idea. In the following essay, I will explain my own view. It is often said that many
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 are free to enjoy and I go along with
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 idea.
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 with, visitors can see the breathtaking scenery without paying.
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, many hikers like to climb up mountains to catch
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beautiful scenery.
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 activity does not need
money
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 but only physical effort. After their hard work, they can take in the spectacular sunset or sunrise on the top of the mountain for free and have a sense of accomplishment.
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,
people
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 cannot buy friendships.
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 means friendships are built on trust and
honest
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.
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,
money
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 probably
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can
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 buy some friends but not friendships.
On the other hand
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, some argue that many best
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 in our lives are built on
money
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. Undeniably, there are many entertainments need to pay
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for, such
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such
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 as
traveling
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, watching movies, and eating cuisine.
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, many
people
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 have their best memory while
traveling
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 around the world.
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, the costs are quite expensive and not all
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people
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 can easily afford it.
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, many entertaining activities
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 cost a lot though they will always bring
people
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 happiness.
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,
best
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the best
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things
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 sometimes are made from
money
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. In conclusion, it is undeniable that sometimes
people
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 need to pay but I totally agree with the point that the best thing in life is free because nobody can buy
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beautiful scenery.

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