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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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These days, due to the ignorance
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people
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 about the environment,
climate
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change
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 has
occured
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occurred
. Several parties believe that preventing
climate
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change
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 is not as crucial as just thinking about how to face
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climate
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. I disagree with the statement above because if
people
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 do not avoid
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climate
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,
due to
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the
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global warming will occur and
the
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natural
disaster
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 due to the heat of
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earth
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the earth
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 will
happend
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happen
happened
. On the one hand,
the
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preventing
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of
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apply
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climate
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change
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 is crucial because it can stabilize the heat of
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earth
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the earth
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.
People
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 can be more aware of how to keep the
earth
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 by planting a lot of trees and reducing the usage of air
conditioner
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conditioners
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 for
examples
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. If individuals
change
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 their habits to be
enviromentally
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environmentally
 habit, the probability of global warming
warming
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would decrease
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earth
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 would be normal.
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,
society
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a society
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who
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that
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 only
think
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thinks
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 about the way to live in
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climate
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the climate
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change
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 era
tend
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 to
do
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apply
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not
have
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to have
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 the
contibutions
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contributions
 and actions
for on
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how to keep the
earth
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 stable.
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, the probability of natural
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disaster
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disasters
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 would
be increase
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increase
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earth’s
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the earth’s
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climate
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 can
also
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 increase the
occurance
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occurrence
 of
natural
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a natural
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disaster
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disasters
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such
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 as forest fires/bushfires.
This
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 issue should be prevented by both citizens and
government
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the government
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.
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, society could reduce
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carbon dioxide emissions usage by using public
transports
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transport
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 everywhere they go.
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,
government
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the government
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 can create
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strict laws for
people
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 who break the rules,
hence
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people
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 can not easily
demage
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damage
damaged
 the environment. To sum up, preventing
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earth’s
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the earth’s
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climate
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 is more critical than only
think
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 about how to face global warming. Because
,
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 taking care of how to reduce the
climate
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change
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 impacts not only can stabilize the
climate
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 but
also
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 can decrease the
occurance
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occurrence
 of natural
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disaster
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disasters
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 due to
the
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apply
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climate
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change
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  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
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  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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