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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Identify the main causes of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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Nowadays, people are concerned about the obesity issue that not only happens to adults but
also
 children.
This
 problem may occur for some reasons and can be tackled with the solutions below. The development of technology gives a huge impact on youth lives, particularly for amusement.
For instance
, online games always become the
first
 choices for teenagers to spend their spare time rather than playing outdoors with their friends. Playing online games will restrict their movement for hours, if
this
 activity continues for a long time, it will make kids gain weight easily. The most effective way to address
this
 problem is by controlling the children’s activities.
Parents
 should give their kids screen limitations to access online games and other activities through the internet.
In addition
, introducing them to new hobbies
such
 as football, tennis, swimming, or other sports will help youth become healthier.
On the other hand
, junk foods known as the unhealthiest cuisine lead to an overweight problem. Busy
parents
 sometimes do not have enough time to prepare
food
 for their adolescence,
as a result
, junk
food
 always becomes a good solution. Many people are unaware of how dangerous
this
 kind of meal is for children. Referring to
this
 issue, the nutritionist should educate the
parents
 about healthy
food
 and lifestyle.
Moreover
, working mothers should consider using a healthy catering service for serving the best quality meals for their
family
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families
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. To sum up,
parents
 and children should work together to start a healthy lifestyle. Consuming nourishing
food
 will not be enough if
the
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apply
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young people do not move their
body
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bodies
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 for exercise.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dietary habits
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Processed foods
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Nutritional education
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Preventative measures
  • Health policies
  • Urban planning
  • Caloric intake
  • Metabolic health
  • Screen time
  • Physical activity
  • Junk food
  • Food desert
  • Body mass index (BMI)
  • Portion control
  • Mindful eating
  • Lifestyle diseases
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