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You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter introduce yourself • explain what sort of job you would like and say what experience and skills you have Write at least 150 words.

#job #employment #agency #sort #skills
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inquire about
fast
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the fast
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 food industry vacancy which you
were
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apply
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advertised
Sun
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in Sun
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 Day Time Newspaper. I am currently
studding
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studying
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 Hospitality
management
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Management
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 Course at
University
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the University
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 of South
wales
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Wales
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 and
this
 is
three year
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 degree program. I would be grateful if you could inform me
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that
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what
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 sort of
part time
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part-time
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 jobs
available
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are available
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 in
food
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the food
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 industry because most of the time I am attending the morning lesson and evening possible to work. It is really important to me because I can gain
my
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apply
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working experience and cover my living cost. Previously, I worked at
subway
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a subway
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 restaurant as a sandwich artist
over
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 2 years. My responsibility was preparing
Sandwich
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sandwiches
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 and cashiering and organize
mise-en- place
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. So I can speak English
Tamil
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and Tamil
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 as well.
Also
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,Also
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 I worked at Hilton Hotel as a waiter and have six months
food
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of food
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 serving experience as well. If you have any vacancy relevant
my
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to my
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 experience, Please contact me through email. Thanks for your assistance.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Asanka
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