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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Tell him which team won - Describe the conditions on the day - Say how you felt about the match Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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You play a team sport with some friends.
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 week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in
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, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Tell him which team won - Describe the conditions on the day - Say how you felt about the match Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. The knock-on effect of volunteering on the lives of individuals can be profound. Voluntary work helps foster independence and imparts the ability to deal with different situations, often simultaneously,
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 teaching people how to (1)______ their way through different systems. It
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 brings people into touch with the real world; and,
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, equips them for the future.
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, young adults in their late teens might not seem to have the expertise or knowledge to impart to others that say a teacher or an agriculturalist or a nurse would have, (2)______ they do have many skills that can help others. And in the absence of any particular talent, their energy and enthusiasm can be harnessed for the benefit (3)______ their fellow human beings, and

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartfelt concern
  • vicarious victory
  • grueling match
  • unyielding spirit
  • team cohesion
  • adverse weather conditions
  • sense of camaraderie
  • indomitable spirit
  • speedy recovery
  • anticipation for your return
  • atmospheric tension
  • overwhelming support
  • strategic triumph
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