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Every country has poor people, and every country has different was of dealing with the poor. What are some of the results of world poverty? What can be done to help the poor?

It is a fact that thousands of families, no matter how affluent the
country
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 they live in, are living in grinding
poverty
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. Poor people are deprived of essential goods and services to the point where their life becomes dreadful.
This
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 essay examines interesting facts
of
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poverty
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 and offers some possible solutions.
To begin
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 with, the most critical factor responsible for
poverty
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 is either war or an armed uprising in a
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.
For example
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, Syria has been going through
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 uprising for a few years. It is estimated that half of Syrians have been displaced by the fighting, and left with no shelter, food, and other essentials. Their children do not have access to drinking water
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 school. It is a sorry plight of all war-torn
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. War or an armed uprising is not a solution to any problem. The only solution they have is to sort out their disputes and disagreement
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 bilateral peaceful dialogues.
Besides
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 the war-torn
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, other strong
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such
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 as India and China face the challenges of population explosion and underdevelopment. Their governments have a long way to go to create wealth per capita for their citizens. On a positive note, they have identified their shortcomings, and are fixing them by controlling the birth rate and developing resources. Other
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 go through the problems of unemployment and natural disasters. They rely on foreign aid to address their issues.
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, the richer nations now are trying to create job opportunities by industrializing
such
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countries
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. Bangladesh is a classic example of being the number one
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 in apparel manufacturing currently. In conclusion,
poverty
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 is an inescapable reality, and each
country
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 has its challenges - for some challenges, they themselves are responsible, and for others, they depend upon the mercy of Mother Nature. So far so good, much good work is being done. (303 words)

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