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Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #punishments #offenders
1. Describe your roles in completing
this
project
. What did you do? How did you help the team accomplish its objectives? We mapped out the
project
 beforehand. I accomplished my part of the
project
 well that I undertook throughout the semester.
Additionally
, I have not only consulted with shelter administration
,
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 but
also
 made
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edition
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on
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 the presentation template with my teammates. 2. What helped you
fulfill
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 your roles well? My confidence and
self -efficacy
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 emboldened me to culminate my role concerning the
project
 quite well.
This
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also
 emphasizes
also
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 as well 3. What would have helped you
fulfill
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 your roles better? I think that I fulfilled my tasks better in relation to
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. I do not see the aid of any other thing
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 my role. 4. What are the indications that your
project
 was successful? Did you gather enough data to know if your
project
 was successful? What other kinds of indicators could have helped you know if your
project
 was successful? I and my teammates worked
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a lot on the
project
. I have researched to find adequate data about animal welfare in Azerbaijan. I and my teammates arranged a survey and poll among our university students to raise awareness about
the
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animal welfare. We actually created as a team an Instagram account called “Rescued Lives” to raise awareness of
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 large
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 of people. Not saying enough, we decided to go directly to the shelter to
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 and
making
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 close contact with them. So, based on these achievements, I can say that
this
 is a successful
project
. 5. Why was
this
project
 important for you personally?
This
project
 is indeed useful for me because
this
 kind of
projects
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 primes us to work on larger projects in the future.
Moreover
, I think that
this
project
 has increased my sympathy towards
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animals.
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