Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Other believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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. I will discuss both points of view and give my opinion in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, people think that wild

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of wild

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are kept in cages or limited space.

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life span would be decreased , because they cannot

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with the aim of making money.

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argued that

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in cages are give information about them.

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play a vital role in

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wildlife.

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education and

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makes more vaccines for human. In the

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human population are more than other living

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new vaccines and medicines.

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zoos

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can help to protect endangered species and scientists

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studies

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on animal behaviours. In conclusion,

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have only some advantages rather than it is

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humans. While

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every wild

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wild

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should not

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in limited spaces.

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