Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion

The discussion regarding the influence of modern
technologies
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sociability
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the sociability
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of
people
sparked a heated debate. Some
people
opine that it has negative aspects while there are others who are convinced in
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of
this
trend. I concur with the previous notion, but
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essay will examine both sides.
First
of
all
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it should be discussed the point of
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the negative
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influence of
technologies
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on
sociability
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the sociability
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of
people
. Some
people
are convinced that modern devices, applications and other
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tools heavily reduced alive bonds between
people
.
For instance
, some analytical
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approve that abilities
of making
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friends in
population
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has
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been
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decreased mostly due to
internet
technologies
. Well, the fact is that
such
analytical researches are not common, and
bring
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not enough
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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to
this
thesis.
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the other hand, there are plenty of studies which
brings
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truly convincing testimonies which
confirms
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confirm
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positivity
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the positivity
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of
internet
technologies
in
context
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the context
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of
growth
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the growth
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of
sociability
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the sociability
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of
people
. To
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, distant methods of connection between
people
, which
also
include
internet
devices and applications, facilitated the rise of frankness
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brought trust and openness between conversational partners.
Moreover
,
the
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technologies
help
people
make new good and productive relations not only in their own country
,
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but
also
abroad.
Therefore
current
technologies
and
sociability
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the sociability
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of
people
make
a
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great compatibility. To conclude, the great role of modernization and innovations in lifting social
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to a new super level, which can be characterized as more productive and comfortable for users, should be noted.
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  • accessibility
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