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social media is more and more popular in modern life. It brings many benefits but still has disadvantages. What is your opinion about that?

In recent years, social media is taking a huge part in our lives and many people spend
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 on it.
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 it has both negative and positive impacts on our life, in my view, the latter overtakes the former. In terms of disadvantages, it is undeniable that many young people spend too much of their
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 on social media,
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, Instagram, and Facebook. It is
so-called
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 "
SNS
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 addiction" and
this
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 is an emerging social crisis. Research from Tokyo University pointed out the correlation between the amount of
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 a person spends on
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 and the chance of getting depression, and those who spend more
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 on
SNS
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 tend to suffer depression twice as often as others.
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,
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 brings us a huge social problem, and managing the
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 we spend on it should not be too much.
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, the advantage is that we can connect with faraway
friends
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. As globalization is accelerated in recent years, it is getting common to study abroad or to live abroad.
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, it is getting common to have
friends
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 or family
in
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 long distances. About 10 years ago, I studied abroad in Canada and I still keep in touch with those who exchanged messenger accounts.
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, there is no way to reach out to my
friends
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 with whom I didn't exchange accounts. So,
SNS
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 is a vital tool to stay in touch with distant
friends
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. To sum up,
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 there are some negative impacts on social media, I fully agree with the view that the advantages overtake the disadvantages
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 because I value
friends
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 and family more than anything,

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