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People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 email on behalf of all people in
Hampshire
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the Hampshire
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 area as we have been facing
with
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apply
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the
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apply
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internet
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 connection problems
during
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a few days ago. We had a local council meeting yesterday and I found out the
internet
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 problem is not solely limited to the apartment in
where
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which
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 I reside. Every individual in our area was complaining about the speed, interruptions, and accessibility of the
internet
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;
therefore
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, contacting the provider company seemed to be the only option. It should be considered that everybody should have
an
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access to the
internet
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 as a remarkable percentage of actions should be done online. Unfortunately, all
council
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 members were really furious because they failed to accomplish their important tasks
due to
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 the
internet
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 problem. Please let us know the time that
this
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 problem is supposed to be solved and
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additionally
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 we request you to consider informing your clients about the probable connection impairment in advance. In that case, they will be able to find a solution or an alternative way to have
an
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access to the
internet
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. We are waiting to get your reply, Kind regards, Maria
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grammar
Ensure consistency in tense. For example, change 'facing with the internet connection problems during a few days ago' to 'facing internet connection problems for the past few days.'
task response
Provide specific examples or details of how the internet issues are affecting people to strengthen your argument.
grammar
Check for minor grammatical errors such as 'an access' should be just 'access.'
tone
The letter has a clear and polite tone appropriate for formal communication.
structure
The structure of the letter is logical and easy to follow.
greeting closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used for a formal letter.
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