Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Nowadays, many
people
use
distance
learning
program
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programs
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to
study
at home. But other
people
do not
use
this
method
because these
people
think that
method
is not effective and comfortable for themselves.
Moreover
, they assume , attending
college
or
university
are
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is
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better than
distance
learning. I think that
beneficial
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a beneficial
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method
is attending
college
or
university
.
Additionally
, l presume,
if
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it
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has different ways and
method
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methods
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of
distance
learning. .any
people
choose
attending
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to attend
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college
and
university
for themselves and their generation. If paragraphs
to
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are to
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come , we shall see both
the
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perspective and l shall put forth my views. These days, technology and educational effectiveness are increasing and improving day by day .
Moreover
, many
people
use
different technology and one of them ,
they
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is they
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use
telephone and computer.
Therefore
, they are working and finding
solve
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for
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to
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their problem with
telephone
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the telephone
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. So, many
people
presume ,
distance
learning is effective and better than
attend
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attending
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college
or
university
because
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the telephone
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telephone
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telephones
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and
computer
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computers
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have become
on
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one
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piece
their
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of their
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life .
For example
, some
people
have
plane
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plans
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for their graduates and they choose
distance
learning for themselves.
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Furthermore
, they
use
distance
learning but they cannot benefit as much
attending
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from attending
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college
or
university
.
Then
, they realize soo late
this
method
is not useful and comfortable for them . But, they
have
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do have
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not much time to
learning
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learn
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and
studying
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study
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. If they had chosen
right
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way
, they would have achieved a lot of success and they would not have lost much time . I think most
of
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the
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people
use
on
old
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the old
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method
.
Old
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method
is attending
college
or
university
to
study
. I presume, if many
people
go to
college
or
university
to learn and
study
, obviously, they will
be achieve
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their goals and they will be
scholar
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scholars
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and intelligent. If
who
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someone
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is going to
college
or
university
to
study
,
this
person will be sensible and their
world-look
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world look
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will be wide than
who
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those who
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is
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are
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studying with
distance
learning.
Moreover
, who is going to
university
or
school
,
this
person
meet
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meets
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and
bond
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bonds
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with other
people
.
For instance
, two pupils are studying every day and
once
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one
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pupil
use
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uses
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distance
learning but
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the other
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other pupil
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another pupil
other pupils
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always
go
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goes
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to
school
.
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Furthermore
, they are spending equal time for themselves but their knowledge is not equal .
Boy
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The boy
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always attending
school
and his knowledge
better
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is better
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than who is always
use
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using
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distance
learning. In my opinion,
alternative
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the alternative
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and right
way
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ways
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of attending
school
or
university
. In conclusion, many
people
presume
better
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a better
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way
of
this
attending
college
or
university
for many citizens.
Additionally
, most
people
know which
way
is better and
effective
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more effective
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for
themselves
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them
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on
the
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apply
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top of that , they believe,
lf
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if
they go to
college
or
university
to
study
, they will
be achieve
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achieve
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their goals and success.
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