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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Most people prefer to
study
 online to stay at home
however
, others
belive
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believe
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 that it
does
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is
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 not able to bring
more
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much
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 profit
as
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than
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to go to
unversity
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university
 or
colleage
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colleague
college
. I agree
this
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with this
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 view
which
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about which
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pupils
 should go to
unvesity
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university
 or
colleage
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colleague
college
.
l
 will share my own view in the upcoming paragraphs namely
l
 will try to explain why choose
this
way
. In
t he
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the
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 modern
time
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times
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most people
use
distance
 learning
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programmes
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programme
 the cause
of
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apply
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this
 they account
this
way
 more comfortable and efficient rather than
old
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the old
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method
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methods
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which
write
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writes
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paper
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a paper
the paper
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 and
read
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reading
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the book
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book
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books
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. And
also
 many
unversities
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universities
 and
colleages
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colleges
colleagues
use
distance
 learning
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programmes
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programme
 in modern cities.
For instance
 , in the Filandies schools, most
pupils
study
 online , if they go to school , they do not
use
 paper and pen , they
use
planshet
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planchet
 or computer to do exercises .
Nevertheless
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 they stand in three
rank
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ranks
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in among the best schools row which the highest level of
study
 and teach of these schools . Their goals and the reason
of
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for
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 the best school,
they
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apply
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 are going to provide the
pupils
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pupil's
pupils'
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study
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with study
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 free and they want to learn new
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technologies
tecnolohies
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technologies
 and
also
 they try to invite gadgets which
more
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are more
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politable
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profitable
 than others
However
,
l
 prefer to
pupils
 should attend
to
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school to get
goon
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good
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lesson
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lessons
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 the reason why some people who live in
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a village
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village
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villages
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 or small
town
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towns
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can not
study
 online
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is
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because they always have
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the problem
a problem
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problem
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problems
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of
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with
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internet
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the internet
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, so the
programme
do
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does
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 not suitable for some
them
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of them
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.And
also
this
programme
 is made much
awkwards
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awkward
awkwardness
 in our country .
For example
,when the "
Corona virus
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Coronavirus
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 "
infecton
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infection
is came
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is come
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in
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into
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 our country all places are closed and
enounsed
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announced
karantin
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quarantine
 for all folks , the reason why
this
 infection is passed
through
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by
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air
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the air
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, so many
pupils
 had to
use
distance
 learning
programme
. The result
the
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is the
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 education system quality is down
,
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apply
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because some
pupils
 even did not
study
instaed
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instead
 of it they worked ,the results
are show
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show
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 that
the
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apply
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Uzbekistan do not ready to
study
trough
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through
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distance
leaning
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learning
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programme
 .
Any
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way
l
 prefer we
use
old
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the old
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 method because
this
way
 has been proving efficient for
a
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apply
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long years . In conclusion,
study
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studying
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 offline is better for
pupils
 than other ways in any situation the cause
of
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apply
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this
 the teachers can control their students
as well as
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, as well as pupils,
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pupils
 can get
lesson
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lessons
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 well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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