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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many students
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 online platforms for distance learning
programs
,
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 people argue that more essential if study at an institute. In my opinion, it is better to study at a college or university than distance learning at
home
. Because studying
in
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at
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these university
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this university
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 is more convenient that at
home
 and has all the conditions. I will put my
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thoughts
 into words in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, learning is a process that often requires feedback. In the case of institutions like school, college or universities
one
 get u
derstand
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understand
 their lackings from their peers or teachers
help
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 them to find out their mistakes which is near
to
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impossible for
programs
 designed for learning at
home
. For
instence
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instance
, I had to complete
one
 of my undergrad semesters through online
classes
 due to the prevailing lockdown during the Corona breakout. Though I secured the mark scores I found myself struggling in the
next
 semester as many of the previous courses were related to the current
one
 that I could not realise properly over online
classes
.
Consequently
, my score went down.
Therefore
, it is always better to attend
classes
physicly
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physically
instead
 of attending remotely. Another point worth mentioning is that a degree obtained from an
instution
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institution
 not only
master
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one
on
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in
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 that particular degree subject but
also
 it
thaught
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taught
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 to be disciplined, and develop a networking mentality which is barely possible to include in remotely taught
programs
.
For example
, students are bound to follow the instructions during
the
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schooling hours which
make
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 the sense of discipline and
also
 attending
classes
 with diverse learners lets them create a larger network to
further
 discuss the study they are learning.
To
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 conclusion, institutional learning
programs
 will be always on top of learning remotely at
home
.
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