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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many students
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 online platforms for distance learning
programs
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,
some
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 people argue that more essential if study at an institute. In my opinion, it is better to study at a college or university than distance learning at
home
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. Because studying
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at
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these university
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this university
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 is more convenient that at
home
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 and has all the conditions. I will put my
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thoughts
 into words in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 with, learning is a process that often requires feedback. In the case of institutions like school, college or universities
one
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 get u
derstand
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understand
 their lackings from their peers or teachers
help
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 them to find out their mistakes which is near
to
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apply
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impossible for
programs
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 designed for learning at
home
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. For
instence
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instance
, I had to complete
one
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 of my undergrad semesters through online
classes
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 due to the prevailing lockdown during the Corona breakout. Though I secured the mark scores I found myself struggling in the
next
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 semester as many of the previous courses were related to the current
one
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 that I could not realise properly over online
classes
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.
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, my score went down.
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, it is always better to attend
classes
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physicly
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physically
instead
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 of attending remotely. Another point worth mentioning is that a degree obtained from an
instution
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institution
 not only
master
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one
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on
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in
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 that particular degree subject but
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 it
thaught
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taught
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 to be disciplined, and develop a networking mentality which is barely possible to include in remotely taught
programs
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, students are bound to follow the instructions during
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schooling hours which
make
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 the sense of discipline and
also
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 attending
classes
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 with diverse learners lets them create a larger network to
further
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 discuss the study they are learning.
To
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In
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 conclusion, institutional learning
programs
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 will be always on top of learning remotely at
home
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