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In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

#technology #relationships #people #become #development
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These days,
technology
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 is a massive
development
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 for various countries, it is obvious that
technology
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 becoming accessible to any
generation
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, as makes it easier to communicate which is engages
people
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 strongly to keep a relationship together as well. It leads to improvement for the environment and society in several ways. It is possible
technology
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development
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 able to make beneficial associated with
people
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's lives and
relationships
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.
To begin
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 with,
technology
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development
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 is an essential role play and affected to improve
people
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 in different ways involving education, work and
relationships
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 for help positive to understanding. To illustrate, the majority
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people
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of people
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 in my country spent time
with
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on
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 social media to communicate and contact
for
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apply
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each other, it makes
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easy
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 and comfortable to attractive for ones loved.
For instance
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, dating applications
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 very popular and interactive for teenagers to find a partner as well as which communicate
with
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via
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 online texts conversation together.
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, the fact the USA dating apps are increasing significantly for
people
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 who enjoy playing and can achieve some goals for changing
relationships
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 from friend to boyfriend or girlfriend.
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, it is dangerous for many
people
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 as well as crime and a bad social environment.
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, the
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 gap is very important to become a positive and
also
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 show specific experiences from the older
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.
However
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 it is difficult to understand and communicate
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 different cultures, behaviour, etc.
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 social media is the main factor to access as combined with any
generation
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 together for keep
relationships
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. In conclusion,
technology
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 is the main factor in the
development
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 of society and has benefits for their
people
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, whereas shows some drawbacks and affected
people
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 too.
Thus
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people
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 should concentrate and learn positive ways to use it effectively.
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