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In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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These days,
technology
 is a massive
development
 for various countries, it is obvious that
technology
 becoming accessible to any
generation
, as makes it easier to communicate which is engages
people
 strongly to keep a relationship together as well. It leads to improvement for the environment and society in several ways. It is possible
technology
development
 able to make beneficial associated with
people
's lives and
relationships
.
To begin
 with,
technology
development
 is an essential role play and affected to improve
people
 in different ways involving education, work and
relationships
 for help positive to understanding. To illustrate, the majority
people
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of people
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 in my country spent time
with
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on
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 social media to communicate and contact
for
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each other, it makes
easily
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 and comfortable to attractive for ones loved.
For instance
, dating applications
is
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are
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 very popular and interactive for teenagers to find a partner as well as which communicate
with
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 online texts conversation together.
Moreover
, the fact the USA dating apps are increasing significantly for
people
 who enjoy playing and can achieve some goals for changing
relationships
 from friend to boyfriend or girlfriend.
However
, it is dangerous for many
people
 as well as crime and a bad social environment.
Furthermore
, the
generation
 gap is very important to become a positive and
also
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generation
.
However
 it is difficult to understand and communicate
involves
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 different cultures, behaviour, etc.
Although
 social media is the main factor to access as combined with any
generation
 together for keep
relationships
. In conclusion,
technology
 is the main factor in the
development
 of society and has benefits for their
people
, whereas shows some drawbacks and affected
people
 too.
Thus
people
 should concentrate and learn positive ways to use it effectively.
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