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profit made by four cafes in Richmond,Australia during period of time from 2005 to 2015

The line graph represents information about the profit made by four cafes in
Richmond
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,Australia during a period of time from 2005 to 2015. Noticeable is that
Coffee
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 Day and Short Streer
Coffee
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 decreased their numbers  while
Richmond
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 Blue grow up. What about Pretty Cup it remains stable, with small fluctuations. Pretty Cup had not had any significant changes and maintained its profit of around 20
million
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 dollars, which makes them the most successful of all represented cafes. The
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 and
third
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  place is taken by
Coffee
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 Day and Short Street
Coffee
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 with 15 and 10
million
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 respectively.
Then
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 both cafes dropped to 5 and 0
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 dollars in 2015. The opposite situation was with
Richmond
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cafe
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, it grow up from 5 to 10
million
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 dollars in 2015 which made it the
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second
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 most popular
cafe
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 in
Richmond
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. Looking from an overall perspective the most profitable was Pretty
Cafe
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,
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second
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 and
third
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 places were taken by
Coffee
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 Day and Short Street
Coffee
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,
however
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 after they decreased and the profit growth of
Richmond
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 Blue, the
last
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cafe
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 become the
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second
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 most profitable
cafe
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 in
Richmond
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, Australia.

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