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Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Fast
foods
 are very popular
in
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these days as compared to the past days,
as a result
, a lot of
population
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the population
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 eat
consistensly
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consistently
like
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on
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 a daily
basis
 but there are some
drwabacks
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drawbacks
 are consuming
regualra
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regular
basis
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bases
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such
 as
obesity
 and digestion problems, even though some benefits are eating junk
foods
 like
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a time
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time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and
affortable
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affordable
 price.
This
 essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons. On the one hand, fast
foods
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food
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 provides some benefits to the population. One of the main advantages is that the cost of
food
 is very economical as compared to
the
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making traditional
foods
 because the junk
foods
'
ingrediants
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ingredients
 are very cheap and use
minimum
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the minimum
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 amount of
ingrediants
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ingredients
 to make
a fast
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fast food
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foods
.
For example
,
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in a
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a
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the
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 largest fast
food
 company in the world which is
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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,
a
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has a
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muffin price is only $5 and a coffee is just $2,
therefore
, numerous western
population's
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population
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 everyday
breakfast
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breakfasts
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 are these two items. Another main reason is that it can easily buy from the shop and petrol
station
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stations
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around
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everywhere as compared to making
food
 at home because nowadays all people are working,
therefore
 they cannot have
a
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time to make
food
 for satisfying their appetite and their family members, so
tehy
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they
cna
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can
 easily buy
foods
 from fast
food
 shops.
On the other hand
, there are numerous
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
 are contains of eating junk
foods
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food
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 on a regular
basis
. One of the main drawbacks is that it creates
obesity
 who are eating
consistanly
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consistently
 because
tehse
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these
 kinds of
foods
 are not
helathy
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healthy
 and it can increase
fat
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the fat
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 ratio of eating a burger.
For example
,
accroding
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according
 to the Indian times
of
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Article
saiad
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said
 that more than 60% of
the
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mankind
are
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is
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 affected by the
obesity
 problem across the world. Another main reason is that digestion
problem
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problems
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, these instant
foods
 are always making indigestive
problem
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problems
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 when eating on a
regualar
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regular
basis
 due to they add
unhelathy
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unhealthy
healthy
 essence and cheese for taste in order to people get more suffer. To conclude, fast
foods
 are always unhealthy and
it
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 can create more diseases like
obesity
 and indigestion. Even though,
this
 trend has some benefits of
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and
affortable
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affordable
 cost.
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