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In many countries, children today have more freedom than they used to. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is fact that
freedom
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 makes men perfect and it is a most necessary thing in everyone's life.
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 in
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 latest generation,
children
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 have more
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 as compared to the past. So some group of thinkers believes that it is a positive trend while few people said that it is a negative trend. I strongly agree with the primary statement and my views will be explained in a
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 with, teenagers not only get more experience but
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 feel the situation while they have good
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.
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, a youngster can explore their hidden ability and they can set careers in which they all specialize.
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, one research conducted by The Times of India found that there is any child have a high chance to become
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famous person or doing the job whatever they want to do. While giving permission to
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 there are 100% success ratio in the market to be a good businessman or became an athlete.
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, in the ,past no one child has a right to do anything without permission from their parents so due to the threat of their guardians' youngsters are not able to fulfil their wishes and in the
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future they
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 work in the same condition as their parents live because teenagers do not have any chance to explore their mastery. Before decades there was a routine that
children
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 follow their parent's businesses or work but nowadays
children
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 can do anything whatever they want to become with the permission of their mentor. In conclusion, there is more benefit to giving
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 to their
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 as they are able to understand the situation and became good members of society.
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