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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Most
children
 and teenagers use mobile phones for long hours daily. In my opinion,
this
 builds a negative
impact
 on
children
's mental health due to the high volume of data overlooked in a short period of time when
children
 scroll on social media platforms which are intelligent enough to provide continuous feeds.
Firstly
, with emerging technologies used by social media platforms, they are able to filter and provide data relevant to
children
's interests in their search history.
Children
 are not aware of
this
 trap and they unintentionally surf through the content one by one
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this
 leads
children
 to stay hours without knowing the time they spent.
Furthermore
, unlike in the past, more than 75% of teenagers have their own mobile phones and they do not have the capability to understand the risk and their self-control on over usage which can be emphasised as the main reason for them to spend longer time with their phones.
On the other hand
, a large volume of information coming in a short duration has a considerable
impact
 on brain functionality and
this
 will direct problems in
children
's mental health. The Human brain is designed to analyse information in a rhythmic way and if a high volume of data feeding to your memory within a shorter duration, there will be a huge
impact
 on
children
's analytical and memorizing capabilities.
In addition
 to
this
,
children
 might addicted to watching irrelevant content on the internet which are irrelevant to their age and
this
 will result in many mental complications by seeing them regularly. In conclusion, I understand
this
 as a negative
impact
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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