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Directions: Read the question below. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. What is the most important element to make business success? ▪ Strategy ▪ Employees ▪ Money Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

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It is becoming more common to read the
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 because we can access it easily on our computers or smartphones.
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, I disagree with the statement that using the
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 is the best way to learn about the
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 every day. The reasons for my opinion are as follows.
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 that we can read in newspapers or see on television will be more reliable. Nowadays on the
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 many of the
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 stories that we see on social media will actually be spam or advertisements.
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 has been controversial recently. A lot of people share pictures or stories online that are false, but
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 many people believe them. Because of
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 is not as good for learning about the
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 because it is not as reliable. I
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 believe that reading the
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 online can be difficult to follow. Many online
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 websites or social media websites are full of advertisements or pop-up ads. They are
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 not well organized: it is difficult to find the
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 that you are looking for without using the 'search' bar. Sometimes, even when using the search option, relevant
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 is difficult to locate. Because newspapers and television have been around for so long, we already know how to find the
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 relevant to us. Though it can be easy to access the
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 in many places, there are times when it is
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too far underground, or in a developing country. In these situations, the
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 may be unavailable to read the
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.
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, there are a number of times when watching a TV or reading a newspaper would be the best way to read the
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. So, online
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 is not the best option for everyone due to connectivity issues. Since more traditional methods of learning about the
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 as newspapers and television are trustworthy, well-organized, and easy to access, I believe that they are better than using the
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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