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It is becoming more common to read the

news

online

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because we can access it easily on our computers or smartphones.

However

, I disagree with the statement that using the

Internet

is the best way to learn about the

news

every day. The reasons for my opinion are as follows.

First

, I believe that the

news

that we can read in newspapers or see on television will be more reliable. Nowadays on the

Internet

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many of the

news

stories that we see on social media will actually be spam or advertisements.

However

this

is unclear until you click on the story. On the same topic, fake

news

has been controversial recently. A lot of people share pictures or stories online that are false, but

unfortunately

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many people believe them. Because of

this

, the

Internet

is not as good for learning about the

news

because it is not as reliable. I

also

believe that reading the

news

online can be difficult to follow. Many online

news

websites or social media websites are full of advertisements or pop-up ads. They are

also

not well organized: it is difficult to find the

news

that you are looking for without using the 'search' bar. Sometimes, even when using the search option, relevant

news

is difficult to locate. Because newspapers and television have been around for so long, we already know how to find the

news

that is

relevant to us. Though it can be easy to access the

Internet

in many places, there are times when it is

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for example

, in the countryside,

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too far underground, or in a developing country. In these situations, the

Internet

may be unavailable to read the

news

Therefore

, there are a number of times when watching a TV or reading a newspaper would be the best way to read the

news

. So, online

news

is not the best option for everyone due to connectivity issues. Since more traditional methods of learning about the

news

such

as newspapers and television are trustworthy, well-organized, and easy to access, I believe that they are better than using the

Internet

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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