Directions: Read the question below. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. From the following list, which industry has made the biggest technological advancements in the last decade? ▪ Healthcare ▪ Banking ▪ Education Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

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In the past decade, we have seen many important technological advancements take place in the world.
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has been especially true in the areas of healthcare, banking, and
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, let us think about some of these advancements from the point of view of teachers. In the past, teachers used to stand at the front of the room and write on a blackboard with white or yellow chalk. It was a very messy job. My father, who was a teacher, used to come home every day from school with chalk all over his blue suit. It was terrible. Over the past decade,
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. Especially in companies, blackboards and even whiteboards are no longer used.
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, a trainer or manager can write on his or her tablet while seated, and everyone can see what they write on a big monitor at the front of the room. It is clean and efficient! For students, having computers and the Internet in the classroom has made the entire world a classroom. Whereas before, when students could only learn what their teachers taught them, they can now explore the universe at their own pace.
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and makes lessons much more interesting. You might wonder if
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is truly helpful or if it is just an expensive toy. Test scores show us that it is very helpful. My own son, James, has become a much better student because of the latest
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. He used to hate school and his grades were always poor, but since his school started to use new
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he has become the best student in his class. Advancements in banking and healthcare have been impressive, but there is nothing more important in life than
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at any age can change a person's life, and so we must always do our best to find ways to improve.
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is the key, and I hope that researchers will continue to invent interesting and useful educational tools for our children.
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