People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

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always had
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an impact
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on peoples day to day life, it appeared
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publicity, tv, public transport,
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and malls
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and today
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their
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influence
raised
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due to using smartphones,
internet
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the internet
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and social media.
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of increasing
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the effect
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of marketing. On the one hand,
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the popularization
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of marketing created
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a competition
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game
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games
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,
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were
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brands have to constantly improve
characteristics
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the characteristics
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of their product to stay relevant.
Mobile
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The mobile
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phones industries
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on
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one
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of the biggest competitive field, where advertising has
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big role, causing companies
improve
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their camera quality, capacity or life of the batteries. Other industries
also
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developed due to marketing,
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, most of the construction companies in Kazakhstan improved their apartment complexes due to marketing strategies by adding baby carriages room in halls or making courtyards closed for strangers,
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it didn't cause a
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pf
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of
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money, but it changes the perspective of costumers view.
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, all of
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competition
becoming
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fake, when some brands do not improve their items and everything they change in product is the words, that describe
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the same
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thing and packaging. The main negative effect caused by
advertizing
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advertising
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it
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apply
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is excessive pricing. In big companies marketing is considered
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apply
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the most expensive
departments
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department
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.
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, all of the expenses
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for
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advertisements, which
contains
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contain
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influencers, billboards, social media,
PR
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and PR
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materials are included
on
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the price of every item. In conclusion, I agree that marketing has
some
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a
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good impact on
peoples
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people's
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life, it drives the competency between brands,
creates
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and creates
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numerous amount of jobs. But in point
were
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where
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it
causing
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causes
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prices to grow without developing
product
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the product
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itself is a big disadvantage that
outweigh
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outweighs
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any advantages.
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