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In some countires, many young people choose to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universitiy studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Taking a gap year is becoming popular among school leavers as they are attracted by the idea of taking a break from studying in order to gain necessary work and life
experience
.
Although
 it is claimed by others that it is a loss of time and school graduates have to continue their education at universities or colleges. In my essay, I am going to see if the benefits of taking a break outweigh the drawbacks. There are some crucial pros of working and travelling before your university studies begin.
Firstly
, you can find a part-time job and you can gain some work
experience
. Apparently, your position will not be high or well-paid,
however
, you can challenge yourself in a variety of spheres,
as well as
 build some valuable connections.
Consequently
, when you get a degree it will be easier to find a better job.
Moreover
, travelling around the world broadens your mind as you see different people and customs,
as a result
, you become more tolerant and communicative.
This
 break can help young people to relax and find new friends around the globe. Later
such
 connections can be vital for their career.
On the other hand
, there is an opposite point of view on that issue. It is believed that students should not waste their time and enter a university after high school. In
this
 case, unfortunately, they do not have any valuable working
experience
. As graduates are normally required to have at least a couple of years of working
experience
, lack of it may lead to certain problems.
Above all
,
due to
 the young age of 17-18, there is a risk of making a wrong choice. So, young people might have regrets or doubts about their chosen career path. Taking everything into account, despite some obvious drawbacks of a gap year,
such
 as lack of working
experience
 or some psychological troubles,
for example
, stress and regrets, there is a huge number of positive points. Taking a free year allows you to explore the world better and understand what future perspectives you have.
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You have effectively addressed the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year.
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