These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The chart above demonstrates how young people spend their leisure
time
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changed between 2002 and 2007. Whilst the
hours
spent on watching television have the biggest proportion among the activities, it can be seen that the
time
allocated for bowling is the least. Doing sports, playing bowling, and doing homework have decreased in terms of
hours
spent on these activities. There is a significant drop
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in the
hours
per week given for playing sports,
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, doing homework has lost its popularity since it is observable that teenagers have been spending 50
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this
event. Comparatively, the
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watching television and
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shopping increased in the years between 2002 and 2007.
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shopping activity increased in overall, the
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the number of
hours
spent on it. The duration of watching DVDs had an increasing trend from 2002 to 2004;
however
, after 2005,
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trend has been reversed since the beginning
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2005. As a whole,
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for DVDs changed slightly between 2002 and 2007 from 11 to 10
hours
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • migration
  • globalization
  • socio-economic factors
  • traditional norms
  • cosmopolitan environment
  • brain drain
  • assimilation
  • gentrification
  • alienation
  • multiculturalism
  • infrastructure strain
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