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Band 6.5

Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.Do the advantages of being self-employed outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, being
self employed
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self-employed
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 has been chosen by a great number of
people
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 more than being hired in
a
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an
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 office or organization.
this
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 issue has several reasons and there are some drawbacks
in
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to
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 working for
ownself
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yourself
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 that in
this
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 essay, I will reveal them. Recently, the number of
people
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 who
works
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work
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seperately
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separately
 from a company has increased because,
firstly
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, the salary of being a member of an
onrganization's
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organisation's
 staff is considerably lower than the boss. So, in order to achieve high
wage
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wages
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, individuals prefer
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work
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to work
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 freelance or
remote
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remotely
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.
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, a graphic designer in a studio even
by
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apply
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working on various projects in a month will be bad-paid
comparing
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compared
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 with what he has done.
Secondly
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,
people
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 always complain about their
administers
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administrators
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 and colleagues, they can not stand being in a place with some annoying
persons
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people
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. following up, they
work
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 in their houses
by
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with
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 a laptop far away from those mentioned
people
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.
Despit
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Despite
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this
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the
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 fact that working freelance has many benefits, several disadvantages
have
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apply
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.
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 with,
people
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 who do not
work
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 in a factory or company, cannot have assurance which is entirely beneficial for every
workers
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worker
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.
by
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By
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 having
a
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apply
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good assurance
people
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 are able to use many services
such
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 as medicine and hospital at reasonable costs.
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,
emplyeers
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employees
employers
 of any organization are being given perks and advantages during
working
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the working
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 year. They can have loans and financial aid for buying
house
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a house
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 or car.
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, in
MVM
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an MVM
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 car factory, all the
labors
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labourers
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 after working
two
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for two
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 years loyalty will be
abe
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able
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 to purchase one of the vehicles
15
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at 15
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% below the real value. Actually, freelancers have to
work
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 and
safe
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save
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 their money more to have those facilities.
To sum up
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, many
emplyeers
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employees
employers
 leave their
work
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 to
work
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seperately
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separately
 to have
better
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a better
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 income and
work
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 from their
comfort-zone
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comfort zone
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,
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, they would not be able to utilize workers' benefits as much as employed
people
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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