People rarely interact with their neighbours and this is a harmful effect for local communities. What are the possible cause and solutions.

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Citizens rarely get along with
nextdoor
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next door
people
and
this
might be detrimental
for
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local communities. The primary cause of
this
is that most
of
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the
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people
have
two
jobs
to make it possible to pay high rental payments and the most viable solutions are that the
goverment
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government
should regulate rental living prices and
increase
awareness with
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
of the importance of having
time
to interact with our neighbours.
One
of the main
cause
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causes
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is that most individuals need to have
two
jobs
to afford a living for their family so they work early morning until late
night
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.
Firstly
,
this
type of living
lead
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leads
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society to avoid getting along
each
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with each
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other because they have no
time
.
Moreover
, having
this
type of living,
people
tend to not interact with others because they live under so much pressure that there is no
time
for rest or
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socialize
.
This
result
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resulted
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that individuals
felt
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feeling
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disconnected
with
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from
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each
others
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other
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and even they rarely know who is the
nextdoor
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next door
living in their community.
For instance
, in the USA California
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,
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the cost of living is so high that both parents need to have a job to have a roof over their heads, and the
salary
has not been increased for the
last
ten years.
One
of the possible
solution
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solutions
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is that the
goverment
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government
need to pass a law that offers affordable houses and rental apartments because
this
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these
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expensive prices for renting lead
the
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society to live in so much stress. It is not a
sorprise
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surprise
hearing
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hear
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that an individual
suffer
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suffers
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from blood pressure or anxiety due to these economical crisis. The
second
solution is to
increase
the
salary
to make a living affordable to everyone without the necessity of having
two
jobs
, so with
this
people
will have
time
to catch up with each other. As result, being able to make a living with
one
salary
,
this
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will result
on
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in
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havign
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having
time
and the desire to get along with neighbours and to know each other. As a
reult
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result
,
havign
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having
more
time
for pleasure,
this
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will offer
a much healthier local communities
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a much healthier local community
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to improve the interaction
within
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among
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people
. To illustrate, Australia is a country in which adults work four days a week and most
of
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the
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families need to have only
one
salary
to cover all their expenses, so a
recently
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study shows that these
people
live
happy
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happily
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because they have
time
to interact with their neighbours. In conclusion, paying high renting
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an apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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and
high
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the high
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cost of
living
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toliving
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lead
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led
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the
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apply
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society to have
two
jobs
,
however
, these brought to the
people
felt
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a disconnect
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disconnect
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disconnected
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with
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from
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each other even in their community because there is no
time
to unwind. The most factual solutions are that the
goverment
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government
need
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needs
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to reduce the cost of living and
increase
the
salary
to interrupt
this
bad circle of poverty and
increase
awareness of the importance to interact with our community.
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