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Some people think it is more beneficial to play sports that are played in teams, e.g. football. However, some people think it is more beneficial to play individual sports, e.g. tennis and swimming. Discuss about views and give your own opinion.

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Few people believe that
sports
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 played in groups have more advantages, while others believe that playing single-
player
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sports
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 is beneficial. In my opinion, both have
benefits
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, but
sports
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 played as a team
outweighs
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 the advantages of playing as an individual.
Sports
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 played as a team help you in teamwork,
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, if you have other players around you they can support you and helps you in overcoming your weaknesses, and your communication skills can be better, and you too learn how to make your relationship bond strong with others.
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, if you are playing a cricket game and it is getting hard for you to play some shot and your fellow mate is an expert in playing that shot so, he can teach you how you can improve your game, and
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, your relationship with him will get stronger and
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 you will improve your gameplay.
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, individual sport increases your self-confidence, in that you rely on yourself, rather than any other
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 and your hard work can not be ruined by someone else mistake, and there is only one
player
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 so, a coach can have complete focus on a
player
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 and can help in improving lots of things in a
player
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.
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, if you are in a swimming sport and you are taking so much time to reach the Finish line so the coach can easily find out where you are mistaking and he or she will work on that thing easily, in that case, you will improve faster. In conclusion, Both
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 have
benefits
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, teamwork can improve your performance, and communication skills, and improve your relationships, whereas in individual
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 players rely on themselves, and no one else is to blame, a coach can focus more on a single
player
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 than a whole team.
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, in my opinion, teamwork
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 overweigh the single-
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benefits
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