You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the Head of Department to change your course. In your letter, explain: what course you are doing now why you are not satisfied with that course what course you would like to change to Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to inform you that I am from the technical department where I am pursuing

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course

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System Testing. I opted for the

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in April. In my

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, I am taught about hardware devices and troubleshooting. Honestly, I am not satisfied with the

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because of two reasons.

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, it is totally different from what was mentioned in the brochure of the College.

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, the

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does not interest me as it is a

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it is difficult for me to concentrate in the class as I have already studied and implemented it in my previous job. Henceforth, I request you

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change my

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to Advance System Testing before the exams. I have read all the details about the

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and have met the students who have taken that

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interests me more than my current

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this

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will benefit me professionally. I would appreciate your help. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Shweta

bhat.shweta17Wed Nov 13 2024

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Consider providing more detail on why the Advanced System Testing course interests you.

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The letter could benefit from more structured paragraphs to improve readability.

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The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for addressing a Head of Department.

coherence cohesion

Each paragraph clearly addresses a specific aspect of the prompt, contributing to a logical flow.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

173 words

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