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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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It is true that many individuals decide their
career
 route early in their
life
 and try to keep on that
path
, and many think that would lead to satisfaction in their working
life
. I agree with that idea, and I think there are many things that will make you satisfied with your
work
. Many people are worried about their job in the future ,especially whom freshly graduated from high school, so many teachers recommend them to select their
career
path
 and focus on it , and that would give them advantages
such
 as, will help them to put clear plan and follow it,
also
 that will make them more organized
moreover
, that will make them less confusing.
For example
, in the USA, a university made a study about choosing the
career
path
 earlier and they found that a higher per cent of people have become satisfied with their working
life
.
Furthermore
, as well there are many things that can make your
work
 more satisfactory
such
 as, the most important thing is to select the right job,
also
 know where you want to
work
 as well as paying attention to the environment of his
work
, it must be a positive place,
finally
,
i
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 think getting well with your workmates is a good thing to make you happier in your
career
. in conclusion, many people tend to choose their
path
 in their working
life
 earlier, I think it is a good thing , and that would make them more arranged in your working
life
 as well as many factors to lead you to a satisfying on your working
life
.
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