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Some people say that to prevent illness and diseases government should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #illness #diseases #government #focus #pollution
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As far as I can judge, Presently, the majority of people ponder that, the government should be paying attention to decreasing environmental contamination and accommodation problems, Meanwhile, these endeavours can influence reducing and defence from sickness and infections. These factors suffer from human health. Currently , the authority must prevent housing problems in view of the fact, many people live on the streets so
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 matter encourages infections especially contagious illnesses which cause human deaths. Certainly, the administration must resolve
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 trouble or provide the best acceptable solution.
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, to build new apartments for homeless citizens ,
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 of that,
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 convenience help to live in comfort. Admittedly, the council should decline environmental pollution
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 as car emissions containing damaging pollutant particles which can contaminate air and water . Either way , they must rectify
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 crucial and vital problem. It is indisputable, that
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 , it is not only the government's shoulders , but
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 the people who live in
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 country should be responsible for everything , particularly , for the environment because, nature can exist or subsist without us , but , Unfortunately , we never live or coexist without nature and environment.
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 of, complaining about every negligible thing we should attempt to save and keep cleaner our environment. in my opinion, the authority should focus more on downsizing contaminations and constructing civilian houses by decreasing housing disadvantages these actions can cause the best solution . But we do not forget our responsibilities when it comes to saving and protecting nature and the earth .
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 , both sides of the attempts are significantly necessary.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental pollution
  • Respiratory illnesses
  • Waterborne diseases
  • Inadequate housing
  • Sanitation
  • Public health
  • Healthcare costs
  • Quality of life
  • Climate-related impacts
  • Sustainable urban planning
  • Green building practices
  • Living conditions
  • Preventing illnesses
  • Government interventions
  • Proliferation of diseases
  • Access to clean water
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