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Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than showing the cultures or artworks from other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As arts have always been an essential part of
the
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human civilization, museums and
art
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 galleries play a central role
of
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 promoting
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art works
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artworks
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 to the public. While some people argue that local
art
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 pieces should be the focus of those facilities, I do believe that the advantages of displaying international artworks outweigh the disadvantages.
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 with, no boundaries
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art
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.
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, many
master pieces
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 of
art
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 in
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history do
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 belong to
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 area. They are priceless pressures for the entire human society.
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 telling example is the well-known painting Sun Flower
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 Van Gogh as I do not think that it belongs to one particular country.
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, everyone is eligible to see the work.
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,
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 the meaning behind an artwork is universal. There should be no problem for people to understand and appreciate the work.
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,
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 can be educational. People, especially youngsters, can learn
culture
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 from different places around the world.
On the other hand
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, exhibiting multi-culture paintings, sculptures, or other
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 forms has various benefits to museums and
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galleries’
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galleries
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 business in which those objects could generate
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 more
interests
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 from the local public. It is a norm that attention equals
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money,
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 more profit can be made from hosting
such
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 exhibitions.
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, not only the money can be used to prepare more exhibitions, but authorities could
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 leverage the opportunity to educate their citizens about
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 appreciation. To conclude, I would strongly oppose the idea of limiting artworks based on the location of a museum or
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 gallery.
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, promoting international artists and their artworks should be encouraged.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • local culture
  • traditions
  • tourists
  • economic impact
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • educational experience
  • art movements
  • historical events
  • balance
  • feasible
  • sustainable
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