Large numbers of people participate in sports that are extremely dangerous. Why do you think people do this? How can the risks of participation be minimised?

Today many
games
are being played all over the world. Some of them are extremely risky and
life threatening
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. Despite
of
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these
facts
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their popularity is growing and many
people
are playing
such
games
on a professional level.
This
essay will identify the reasons why
people
are playing
such
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games
and provide some practical approaches to minimize the risk associated with these
games
.
First
of
all
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we need to find out the reason why
such
dangerous
games
are becoming so popular. To start with, the major attraction for players is good money that could be earned from a single game in just one day.
This
type of quick money increases stimulation among many players to adopt
games
such
as boxing, wrestling, bull riding etc. Perhaps, fame and popularity is
another
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compelling reason that encourages
people
to choose certain
games
.
Furthermore
,
its
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proven that it is human nature to accept challenges and do things differently. Many players love to accept challenges and they want to astonish the world
by
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their unique
talent
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and skills. As these
games
are now being introduced in the world and many
people
are joining them it is important to reduce risks by introducing some policies and procedures.
For instance
, anyone who wants to participate
in particular
games
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would not be allowed to play it until he/she
deemed
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hundred
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per cent
competence
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in
required
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skills and knowledge.
Secondly
, it is important to endorse
high quality
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personal
protection
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equipment and training to combat risk associated with
games
. In conclusion, excellent
level
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of policies, procedures and training are
integral
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part
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of treating the risks associated with
such
games
.
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