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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT WE SHOULD INVEST MORE MONEY IN CLASSROOM TECHNOLOGY AND EQUIPMENT. OTHERS ARGUE THAT WE SHOULD SPEND THIS MONEY ON TEACHERS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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It is an undeniable truth that education plays a prominent role in individuals’ lives.
However
, some believe that we have to invest more currency in
technology
 and apparatus of tutorial rooms.
Although
, others argue that we must spend
this
 amount on teachers. I partially agree with the above statement.
In addition
, in
this
 essay, I will discuss some points to support my opinion.
To begin
 with, I believe that we should spend more amount on
technology
 and
equipment
 because it would be beneficial for children. To illustrate
this
, if
technology
 is available in schools like computers and other
equipment
,
then
 children can enhance their knowledge of modern gadgets
also
 it would be helpful for them not only in school time but
also
 in the future.
Secondly
, by investing a huge amount in classrooms, in order to fulfil the facilities of
equipment
 are valuable rather than spend on other cultural activities.
For instance
, in some government schools, especially in
rural
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, there is an unavailability of furnishings in laboratories which led a lack of expertise among kids.
However
, in urban areas, all kinds of facilities are fulfilled by the authorities of that particular school.
This
 is the reason why parents choose a modern school for their children.
On the other hand
, Government should spend some money on teachers too in front of salaries. Because an educator is the only person who develops children’s abilities and knowledge as well. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated, I would like to conclude that we have to spend more money on
technology
 and
equipment
 in classrooms so, juveniles get more knowledge and
also
 spend some money on educators too, because, in development and personality of a child, there is a big hand of an educationalist.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Classroom technology
  • Interactive whiteboards
  • Tablets
  • Educational software
  • Online resources
  • Learning styles
  • Inclusive learning
  • Personalized education
  • Dependency
  • Mental arithmetic
  • Salaries
  • Training programs
  • Professional development
  • Retain
  • Skilled educators
  • Inspire
  • Motivate
  • Guide
  • Balanced approach
  • Educational ecosystem
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