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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence

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In a few nations, Many individuals are dealing with health issues, as they consume lots of fast
food
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 why the government needs to impose a higher
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 on
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 kinds of
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. I partially agree with
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 because it is not the only option there are
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 plenty of things that they should take in mind. Nowadays, fast
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 is available on every street And it is cheaper than other kinds of
food
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. So, that a lot number of peoples prefer it.
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, if the government is putting more
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 on it as it creates health issues for
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, maybe plenty of poor and middle-class
people
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 stop eating, but the rich ones still will eat it, and
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 the children they just do not care about the
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.
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, there is my cousin’s son knows how to order
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 online, so he just orders fast
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 from their mobile,
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 is not the one but there are many
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 who do that.
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, with the
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, the government should
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 start social awareness programs on social media, news channels, and any other platform available, so the
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 can familiar with what problems they will face if they consume more of that
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, And in that way, Parents will
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 stop their children from ordering it.
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, if
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 are not familiar with what problems they will face from certain kinds of
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 and it is very tasty too,
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 why someone should stop eating it? So, that’s why it is necessary to give knowledge
people
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 about it. In conclusion, the number of
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 will not eat by increasing the
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, but if other things are
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 imposed
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 as social awareness programs that will have a great impact,
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 why I partially agree with it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overconsumption
  • diet-related illnesses
  • healthcare system
  • disincentive
  • public health
  • safeguard
  • economic burden
  • lower-income populations
  • public education campaigns
  • food labeling
  • health implications
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • nutrition education
  • punitive measures
  • inequity
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • productivity
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