Some students take one year off between school and university .Do advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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school or university .Many individuals
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statement and there are many compelling reasons to support my view. These benefits are twofold . One of the
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education a gap
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. If someone
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a
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from their vacation .
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work rather than in earlier times . So should be increasing appear in their
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it is incredibly helpful for their health . Because
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free time , they do some exercises . I think it is an indisputable
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that the many kinds of activities incredibly useful and powerful in their existence would be particularly best
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it has some drawbacks .
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they take education
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gap
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they may lose their previous knowledge . It
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their
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knowledge .
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like behind rather than other students . In
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out their interest about their
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. By way of conclusion ,
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the significance of resuming academic education is
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teenagers
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those who had undergone multiple pressures need to unwind before starting university . So I strongly
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that the superiorities of a
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