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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is the positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's world where
internet
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the internet
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 is
bad
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spread
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to spread
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 among almost all
countries
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this
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 is becoming very easy to post some item on the Internet and sell it anywhere around the world. I strongly believe that it is a positive development for both a
country
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 and its
citizen
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citizens
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 to become more similar due to
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availability
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the availability
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 of all products in any reason or province of a
country
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. There can be a lot of reasons to consider wed spread
product
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availability
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 opposite development.
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 presence of a specific type of
product
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 at any corner of the globe help us to reduce
the
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apply
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luggage weight when we plan for
trip
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a trip
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 to a different
country
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 recently
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availability
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the availability
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 of a charging cable
of
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for
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 my camera made it possible for me to
to
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astonishing photos of my journey of Thailand, I
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towant
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want
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won't
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 be able to even use my camera if that specific cable was not available in the local market.
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Secondly
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 the freedom to buy any
product
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 anywhere around the world
help
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helps
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 a
country
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 economically because it
reduce
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reduces
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 the cost of
setting
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the setting
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of
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up
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 manufacturing plants in every
country
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 for some cheap but commonly used products. It is not sustainable for a
country
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 to produce all the readily huge
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product
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products
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 specially for small countries like Japan and Sri Lanka
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 it will be impossible for Sri Lanka to set up cloth manufacturing plants due to
unavailability
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the unavailability
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 of sufficient land and capital but wearing clothes at a very affordable cost is one of the basic needs of a low GDP
Country
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. To conclude, from the above point it is clear that
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availability
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the availability
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 of any
product
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at
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for
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 every reason is now a basic requirement and increasing similarity among countries is a fruitful and positive development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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