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average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012

The bar chart displays information about bathing suit
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 in New York City from January to June 2012, while the line graph illustrates the temperature changes in the exact location and period. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that more people purchased swimsuits in spring and winter than in summer.
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, the revenue did not ride along in the same trend as temperature because higher temperatures did not always reflect an increase in
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 in 2012. As shown in the bar chart, the bathing suit
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 in January 2012 were ten million dollars and there was an upward trend during the
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 four months, reached to almost three times higher in April which was the highest revenue in
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 monitor period.
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 the figure for revenue experienced a significant drop in the rest of the month. The
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 in June were relatively low at approximately two million dollars. Regarding the temperature, despite the small decline between January to February, an increase in temperatures was recorded over the
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 five of the six months, from around 30 Fahrenheit to 65 Fahrenheit in June.

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