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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is alarming that
smartphones
 occupy an ample amount of time in
children
's schedules. Reasons for
this
 phenomenon vary, and it has several impacts. My viewpoint would be elaborated below.
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 matter.
First
, it is lacking open spaces for outdoor activities
that
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 is one of the oblivious reasons. Along with the rising population of urban
centers
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 and industrial areas is the disappearance of playgrounds, which hinders the younger generation from enjoying physical activities.
Second
, since parents these days have paid a lot of attention to work,
then
 they have no time for their
children
, both taking care
and
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educating
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.
As a result
,
children
 are allowed to use
smartphones
 for their entertainment and studying.
Besides
, it is convenient for parents to keep in touch via a
cellphone
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 with their child. Unfortunately, the topic in question poses several threats. At its simplest, it is possible for
children
 to suffer from numerous diseases. To be specific, blue lights and flickering images are the
culprit
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 of eye impairments, namely myopia. Worse still,
beside
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 the negative effect on physical health, it
also
 causes mental problems,
such
 as autism.
In addition
, spending a huge amount of time on
smartphones
 would impact
children
's life. In detail,
smartphones
 and all the entertainment set on
it
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 distract students away from learning, which is crucial for them in
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latter
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 life, when they have to seek a job.
Moreover
, they could be trapped via
smartphones
. It allows them to connect to the internet, where misleading data is spread without verification and control. In fact, there are uncounted cases in the world
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 the victims are
children
, who are taken advantage of by criminals, in order to induce them to leave home,
then
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 turn them
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 slaves. In conclusion, it is expected that we can utilize the advantages of
smartphones
 in a good way to provide
an
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optimal growth for our future generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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