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Some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use to what extent do you agree or disagree

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A plethora of medicinal, beauty, and food
products
 have been developed to serve human requirements. In order to
test
 the
safety
 of the
products
 to individuals, millions of
animals
 were tested for product
safety
, which some people believe is the best way to confirm
products
 without disastrous effects, while others including me reckon that there is another more promising way to guarantee
safety
instead
.
This
 essay will examine the alternative methods and explain why
animals
 should not be used as specimens. With the advancement of state-of-the-art technology, many methods, which are more effective and cost-saving than using
animals
 have been developed to
test
 the quality of
products
. According to the video published by Nas daily, scientists already invented code that duplicates the real human in the supercomputers, and if the companies have any new medicines or oriental
products
, they can
test
 the artificial human which provides more accurate data and results as they can
test
 for million times without increasing the cost of production.
Therefore
, there is no need to abuse
animals
 in the laboratory anymore.
Furthermore
, some types of clients do not support the
products
 which
test
 on other living things
such
 as rats, chimpanzees, and pigs. Because they think that the
animals
 are innocent and should not be hurt or killed for the testing purposes of humans, they prefer to buy natural
products
 without the pain and suffering of
animals
.
For instance
, Uzarine tested their sunblock on chimpanzees' skins to see the quality.
As a result
, the sales dropped significantly because they know the hidden criminal story behind the process of making it. In conclusion,
although
 it is necessary to use
animals
 as specimens to
test
 the
safety
 of brand-new
products
, there are many more efficient and kind methods to check
such
 as artificial humans, and many more. In my opinion, I disagree and absolutely support the
products
 made from
animals
' pain and death.
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