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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than on other factors. To what extent you agree or disagree.

#people’s #habits #age #group #factors
It is true that the age group of consumers can impact their shopping
behavior
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. I argue it would be a mistake to think it
outweigh
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 other factors.
such
 as
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the wealthy
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wealthy
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wealth
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 level and social influence.
To begin
 with, the
amount
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 of wealth
people
 owned has certainly an essential role associated with
consumption
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behavior
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. There are many aspects of the product
people
has
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 to consider when they make a purchase decision,
for instance
,
price
, quality, appearance, etc.
People
 from
rich
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the rich
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 background is considered less
price sensitive
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compare
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 with poverty.
On the contrary
, poor
people
is
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 mostly driven by
price
, which means when choosing between the same type of products
in
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 different
price
, someone who has weak financial background would choose to go for the cheaper one.
Therefore
, shopping habits have more to do with
people
’s
wealthy
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 level.
Furthermore
, peer influence is equally critical in terms of purchasing products.
Human
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The human
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being
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beings
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 as
social
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a social
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animal
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are
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 influenced by others. From my own experience, I would be much willing to pay for a product if my friends or someone I look up to recommend it. In fact, consumer product companies well understand the theory.
That is
 the reason why companies fund countless advertisements and marketing
campaign
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campaigns
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 every year, where they hire celebrities to promote their goods, and
thus
 take
advantages
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advantage
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 of social
worships
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. Lijieqi streaming shop sold 200 million products in
online
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an online
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 shopping
festival
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festivals
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 is a telling example. To conclude, wealth status and social influence both largely impact
people
’s shopping
behavior
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behaviour
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 other than
age
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the age
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 group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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