People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than on other factors. To what extent you agree or disagree.

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It is true that the age group of consumers can impact their shopping
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. I argue it would be a mistake to think it
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other factors.
such
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the wealthy
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wealthy
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level and social influence.
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with, the
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of wealth
people
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owned has certainly an essential role associated with
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behavior
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. There are many aspects of the product
people
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to consider when they make a purchase decision,
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,
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, quality, appearance, etc.
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background is considered less
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price sensitive
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compare
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with poverty.
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, poor
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is
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mostly driven by
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, which means when choosing between the same type of products
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different
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, someone who has weak financial background would choose to go for the cheaper one.
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, shopping habits have more to do with
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’s
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level.
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, peer influence is equally critical in terms of purchasing products.
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being
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as
social
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animal
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influenced by others. From my own experience, I would be much willing to pay for a product if my friends or someone I look up to recommend it. In fact, consumer product companies well understand the theory.
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the reason why companies fund countless advertisements and marketing
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every year, where they hire celebrities to promote their goods, and
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take
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advantage
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of social
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. Lijieqi streaming shop sold 200 million products in
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an online
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shopping
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is a telling example. To conclude, wealth status and social influence both largely impact
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’s shopping
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other than
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the age
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group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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