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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a cashless society?

#cashless #society
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In the modern eras, internet banking has been tremendously developed resulting in a society without cash. In
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 essay, the benefits and drawbacks of the cashless community will be examined before my perspective on
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 statement is reached. On the one hand, internet banking encourages convenience in the payment of individuals. Nowadays, people
enable
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 to directly buy anything
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 as food,
beverage
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beverages
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,
book
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, or many more, regardless of the cost and place through banking applications with just a few touches on the mobile screen.
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, individuals can transfer a million baht using less than 10 seconds,
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 in the past, people
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 to go to banks and fill up many application forms to transfer the same amount of
money
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.
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, it is very convenient in daily life for consumers and sellers, as the clients can pay for buying stuff without handling cash or a wallet, and sellers do not need to prepare the charge to give to consumers.
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, internet banking may contribute to losing large amounts of
money
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 to hackers. Because some hackers can possibly hack the security of bank accounts.
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 the news in 2021, many accounts from Kasikorn
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, Thailand were hacked and lost the value of approximately 100 million baht.
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, easy payment prompts people to be more in
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debt
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 since the feeling of paying by the digital number on the mobile phone is different from paying by cash.
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, 80% of clients said paying through a banking application makes them concerned less about the value of
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. In conclusion,
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 online banking
makes
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 individuals at risk of being hacked and using
money
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 more than necessary, I believe that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages
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 its convenience.
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, these problems will be tackled by future promising solutions.
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Task Response
Make sure to address both the advantages and disadvantages of a cashless society in detail. Provide specific examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph is well-linked and contributes to the overall coherence of the essay.
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