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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Disscuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in foreign country. Give reason from for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that life is challenging. Moving to a different country to study or to find a great job opportunity is
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 of these challenges.
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 it is a commonly held belief that there are many
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 of living in a foreign country, there is
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 an argument that opposes it.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
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 hand, there are an important
advantages
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 of travelling to another region. Some people are moving to another place to find their dream job or have a significant certificate from a strong university.
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, people who make
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 decision, most of the time , their decision will have a crucial impact on their future life.
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, exploring different cultures is
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 of the significant
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 of studying abroad.
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,
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 year, my sister went to the UK to take an English course,
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and she
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 met
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 of her best friends from Italy , and they know a lot about each other.
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, there are many individuals who argue that living in a foreign city is difficult. It is possible to say that they choose to stay in their city because they do not want to leave their family.
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, if the person is not mature enough, it will be
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easy to change their mindset negatively.
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, many young students can not get the desired outcome because of the effect of the new life on them. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that the
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 strongly outweigh the disadvantages.

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Content/Structure
Plan your answer. Start with a clear view of what you will say. Each paragraph should have one main idea with a reason or example to back it.
Language
Use simple links. Words like and, but, also, for example help the flow between ideas.
Language
Check grammar. Look for subject–verb errors, missing articles, and wrong word order. Read your essay aloud to spot problems.
Structure
End with a clear opinion and a short wrap up so the reader sees your view at the end.
Content
You try to cover both sides of the issue.
Structure
You link ideas with on the one hand / on the other hand.
Examples
You give a real example from life (your sister in the UK).
Conclusion/Position
Your ending shows your view.
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