What are the advantages and disadvantages of technology in our daily lives.

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Nowadays automation is really improving, and in
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I'll express my point of view on the advantages and disadvantages of machinery in our daily lives.
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I want to mention that automation has many adventures but on another side, it has disadvantages
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, nowadays teenagers use smartphones too much, I think it's a misadventure of machinery
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or 1 more, our eyes make it worse after we look at smartphone But
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new technologies have adventures
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like you always have information, you can always play games when you're feeling bored. So in the end, I want to say that we should look at something positively and negatively. We shouldn't say like "Telephones are not good for health". We should always find positivity in anything. Thanks for your attention!
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