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SOME PEOPLE DO NOT LIKE CHANGES AND PREFET TO DO THINGS THEY ARE GOOD AT, WHILE OTHER PEOPLE LIKE TAKING RISKS AND TRYING NEW THINGS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

#people #changes #prefet #risks
It is the biggest truth that taking
risks
 and trying new
things
 is mandatory to develop personal growth
,
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 because from several life experiences a person learns and sometimes it is important to take
risks
 for individuals to achieve their goals.
However
,
others
 believe that they only do those
things
, where they feel comfortable and very good
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 performance. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both these views and give my opinion in the
last
 paragraph.
To begin
 with, we clearly observed from the past decades, individuals who take
risks
 always had to be confident about their responsibility and achieve their dreams in a short time.
In addition
, in the present time, youngsters love to try new
things
such
 as
explore
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 the world,
research
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on
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ancient buildings and other uncomfortable activities, where they can prove themselves and
also
 some of them found hidden gems
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 these kinds of activities.
On the other hand
, people who do not like to learn or try new activities, will never update themselves about global development,
as a result
 these introverted characters never know that with the use of technology they can do work in a fast and easy way.
Moreover
,
introvert
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 characters perform those tasks, where they are good and do not try new
things
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because somewhere they have fear about what
others
 think about them, due to
this
 introverts never come out openly. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that the public
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 to take
risks
 even if they have to compete with
others
 to prove themselves better.
Also
, without performing different competitive tasks a person never improves his/her personal growth.
Therefore
, I personally think that
by
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taking
risks
, it will improve skills as well as make people strong to compete with
others
 on various platforms.
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