Some believe that children should start school after the age of 7 while others think that school should begin from a very young age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, what is the best
age
that kids
are enrolled in primary school
that
has become a heated Correct pronoun usage
apply
controversial
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controversy
.
Some Change the punctuation
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individuals
states
that Change the verb form
state
seven
is the proper age
for most of
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apply
schoolchildren
, while some opponents believe Add an article
the schoolchildren
more
younger Change the word
apply
age
compared with seven
. In my opinion, I partly agree that the standard age
, seven
, is a better choice.
First
of all, it is a vital period for youngers who will become pupils to experience the life of Kindergarten
, due to various
benefits of Correct article usage
the various
Kindergarten
. First
, it is no doubt that preschoolers develop their social skills with their peers and teachers in there, because they need to spend amount
of time Add an article
the amount
an amount
to get
along with these Change the verb form
getting
individuals
before going to
home. Remove the preposition
apply
the
cooperation is the best example in Correct article usage
apply
this
point; therefore
, these precious individuals
' experiences definitely help younger kids
develop more social skills in the future. In addition
, Kindergarten
is the most suitable places
that Fix the agreement mistake
place
helping
preschoolers Wrong verb form
helps
to
develop their Fix the infinitive
apply
self-esteem
. For example
, according to the latest report from Britain Education Institution, compared with someone with low
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a low
the low
level
of self-esteem
who lacking
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lacks
Kindergarten
experiences
, other Fix the agreement mistake
experience
individuals
who attended Kindergarten
shows a normal level
of self-esteem
after they became adults. So, seven
is the most proper age
for most of
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apply
children
who will attend Add an article
the children
to
primary Change preposition
apply
school
, because they need to spend three years
to finish Kindergarten
before next
schooling.
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the next
On the other hand
, there is a
inescapable fact that different Change the article
an
children
has
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have
differnt
ability due to the diversity of gene. Correct your spelling
different
For instance
, a science article reported that approximately 2% kids
in Britain who Change preposition
of kids
has
a high Correct subject-verb agreement
have
level
of intelligent
has had all ability Replace the word
intelligence
of attending
primary Replace the preposition
to attend
school
, including healthy self-esteem
and cooperation before seven
years
old; hence
, some of
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apply
children
who Add an article
the children
has
a high Correct subject-verb agreement
have
level
of intelligent may deminish
the period of preschool and are enrolled in primary Correct your spelling
diminish
school
in a younger age
rather than seven
years
old.
In conclusion, although
seven
years
old is a properChange the noun form
year
years
attending the
primary Correct article usage
apply
school
for most of
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apply
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the oridinary
oridinary
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ordinary
kids
,
because they need to develop the ability Remove the comma
apply
of
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to
cooperation
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cooperate
a
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apply
health
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healthy
self-esteem
, it is time-wasting for most of
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apply
children
who has a high Add an article
the children
level
of intellgent
.Correct your spelling
intelligent
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