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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places, and many nations are believed that
this
 ban is justified, because, smoking is the primary cause for causing
cancer
 and
also
 effecting passive
smokers
, I agree with the given statement and we are going to discuss it in detail in the below essay.
First
 and foremost, smoking is the primary cause of
cancer
 patients, who are getting throat and lung
cancer
, because smoking is making their lungs weaker and weaker that ultimately leads to having lung related diseases,
such
 as
cancer
,
for instance
, In our country most of the patients are getting
cancer
 from smoking, to eradicate that even government intervened and made a government order, that in every movie caution has to be displayed.
Secondly
,
this
 is not just affecting
people
 who are smoking, but
also
 passive
smokers
 feel victims of
this
, particularly, diseases like asthma, even though they are not smoking they are affected by it through smoking passively, like
people
 who smoke right
next
 to him
this
 is causing detrimental effects,
for example
, most of the
people
 who are affected by the passive
smokers
 are getting minor health issues. which are related to the lungs. In conclusion, banning smoke in public areas is justified by many
people
, because in many countries
people
 are getting
cancer
 and even passive
smokers
 are getting side effects through
this
,
that is
 the reason it is followed by many countries.
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