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Band 5.5

The young should get advice from old people than young people. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
elderlies
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elderly
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 are much better
people
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 to ask
a
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apply
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recommendations for juniors rather
that
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than
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 youthful. I completely agree
to
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with
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this
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 view and think that
to ask
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asking
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advice
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 from oldsters can be much beneficial for
youngsters
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.
First
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 of all,
the
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aged
people
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 can give  more meaningful guidance
in
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on
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 almost every topic.
In other words
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, juveniles may request
about
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apply
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anything they need when
the
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life put them in a difficult situation, because of
a
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the
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 wide range of
experience
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experiences
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 of old
people
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. If we inquire
advice
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 about something from young
people
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 they may give the wrong guidance for us and everything
turn
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turns
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to
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out to
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 be bad.
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, my close friend always
try
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tries
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 to get
advice
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 from
elderly
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the elderly
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instead
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 of
young
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the young
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 because of their broad range of knowledge which can be helpful in any condition.
Thus
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, old
people
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’s
advice
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are
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is
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 able to be worthwhile for
youngsters
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.
Second
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 of all, most
of
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apply
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elderly
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the elderly
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 individuals are good at
give
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giving
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 recommendations
for
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to
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youngsters
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compare
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compared
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 to you young.
That is
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 to say, they may give
the
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apply
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advice
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 more deeply and
accurate
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accurately
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 without any extra demands, but
young
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the young
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 may demand from them some things like money for their
advices
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advice
,
therefore
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 old
people
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’s
advice
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much
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is much
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 better for us.
For instance
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, even
me
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though me
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 is not
a
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apply
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good to give
advice
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for
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to
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 my little brother,
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however
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,however
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 when it came to my grandfather it may be better
advices
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advice
 for my brother because of my
grandfather
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grandfather's
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 valuable ideas. To conclude, I strongly believe that
the
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apply
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aged humans giving guidance far more useful  for
young
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the young
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 rather than
get
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getting
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 from
youngsters
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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